Although I have to improve the organization of assignment 2,
it is hard to let the article clearly.
At last, I guess the main reason of this big problem is: I use the brainstorming to make my article.
I think it is a good way to practice my writing and imagination in a short time.
However, I can't organize a good article to be read easily.
Therefore, in assignment 3, I will make a list to decide what I want to write.
Because the invention I decide is mobile phone, it is easier to make pros and cons to introduce the advantages of mobile phone.
I hope that after changing the writing style, I can improve my article.
2007年5月29日
Learning Journal(5/8~5/14)
After I finish the first edition assignment 2.
I found that this article is hard to catch the main point of it.
I think it is because I have to seperate both the place to live and their lifestyle.
If I seperate the pros and cons, I have to write two things in a paragraph.
I think it will let readers confuse.
I found that this article is hard to catch the main point of it.
I think it is because I have to seperate both the place to live and their lifestyle.
If I seperate the pros and cons, I have to write two things in a paragraph.
I think it will let readers confuse.
2007年5月8日
Learning Journal(5/1~5/7)
After I check the discussion about my assignment 1,
I found that the most of mistakes are: grammer and vocabulary.
It's the most difficult to improve because the preposition is hardly to remember how to use in correct place.
Ouch...How can I improve these?
I found that the most of mistakes are: grammer and vocabulary.
It's the most difficult to improve because the preposition is hardly to remember how to use in correct place.
Ouch...How can I improve these?
Learning Journal(4/24~4/30)
In 4/24, we started the chepter 6th and talk about comparing and contrasting.
Before we comment something, we must let two things compare to each others and find differences between them.It can help reader read clearly.
Before I start the assignment 2th, maybe I can list the differences between living in dorminity and home.
Dorminity
Advantage:
Can let students be independent.
Have more free time.
Have good relationship with classmates and roommates.
Disavantage:
Pay more money.
Have to prepare everything in lives by self.
Always stay in the university, seldom go outside.
Home:
Advantage:
Have good quality about lives.
Have good relationship with families.
Save the cost about lives.
Disavantage:
Can't let students be independent.
Lifestyle is same to the families.
Parents somtimes chide about somethings.
Before we comment something, we must let two things compare to each others and find differences between them.It can help reader read clearly.
Before I start the assignment 2th, maybe I can list the differences between living in dorminity and home.
Dorminity
Advantage:
Can let students be independent.
Have more free time.
Have good relationship with classmates and roommates.
Disavantage:
Pay more money.
Have to prepare everything in lives by self.
Always stay in the university, seldom go outside.
Home:
Advantage:
Have good quality about lives.
Have good relationship with families.
Save the cost about lives.
Disavantage:
Can't let students be independent.
Lifestyle is same to the families.
Parents somtimes chide about somethings.
2007年4月24日
Learning Journal(4/17~4/23)
After I make the second edition of the assignment. I think making three paragraph will be easier then just one paragraph. I might be the main reason that I am used to writing three paragraph since I was a senior high school student. In these paragraph, I can write the motive in first, the reasons in second and the conclusion in final. Besides, I think it will be read easier.
Learning Journal(4/10~4/16)
After classmates read my assignment and gave me some comments, I think I still have lots of problem.There are some appearance of my mistakes:
1. Beside of the computer, I wanted to say that I want to major in network, so I also let it be one of my reason. However, the reader felt that it had no connection with the main sentence. After reading again, I think it is true. I have to let "computer science" be the center and make reason from it, not change to another center "network". It might cause confusion in this article.
2. The main sentence is not clear. In the first sentence, maybe I can not write one of reasons quickly. I have to analysis all the reasons and make a main reason. After the main reason, It will understand other reasons easily.
1. Beside of the computer, I wanted to say that I want to major in network, so I also let it be one of my reason. However, the reader felt that it had no connection with the main sentence. After reading again, I think it is true. I have to let "computer science" be the center and make reason from it, not change to another center "network". It might cause confusion in this article.
2. The main sentence is not clear. In the first sentence, maybe I can not write one of reasons quickly. I have to analysis all the reasons and make a main reason. After the main reason, It will understand other reasons easily.
2007年4月8日
Learning Journal (4/3~4/9)
In 4/3 class, we learn what we should write article to let others people to read clearly.
Review the article I have written, I always wanted to write lots of sentence. Therefore, the article is confusing because I wrote something that is not have application with the theme. That's what I feel confused when I review my articles.
Review the article I have written, I always wanted to write lots of sentence. Therefore, the article is confusing because I wrote something that is not have application with the theme. That's what I feel confused when I review my articles.
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